Essay Comment

Authority Accountability and Social Media

The essay is very well written. Gabe uses all three forms of rhetoric but his main approach in his argument is the use of logos. His structure is based off of logic and should be what most people should respond to. He also uses ethos with his sources to back up the claims to have that much more of a convincing argument. There feels as though there might be a bit of pathos used because we all probably do feel less trusting of the government and it might start to make us think about our experiences on the subject. The points he brings up are clear and they all suppose his that thesis that corruption has always been there, it's just more exposed. Gabe's ideas are all organized and split up into paragraphs so each point he has can be expressed without confusion. The argument in itself actually make me think. I never thought of it that the corruption hasn't increased but that we are aware of it. I did read it as a neutral audience and the reasons and evidence Gabe presented were relevant to his thesis. By the end of the essay I believe it did make me believe the overwhelming access we have to different sources such as the media and the internet really do make a difference.

In the 5th paragraph is where Gabe brings up the alternative view that maybe the society we live in is actually what's to blame and there actually is more corruption. I guess one could say that it wasn't fair the amount of backing his alternative view was given. A little more evidence of the opposing view might help make his case stronger when even with evidence supporting the alternative view, his argument triumphs because of how structural the rest of his essay is. The defense he uses for the opposing view he has at the moment is compelling. He stands his ground and says that society now is safer than ever. As of now, any neutral audience would definitely read and absorb the writing and possible be swayed in Gabe's direction. If a little more of a counter argument was introduced, with even more of a defense to make his case, he would win over a bigger group of readers